The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
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The graph shows the increase in the ageing population in
Japan
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, Sweden and the USA. It indicates that the percentage of elderly
people
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in all three
countries
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is expected to increase to almost 25% of the respective populations by the year 2040. In 1940 the proportion of
people
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aged 65 or more stood at only 5% in
Japan
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, approximately 7% in Sweden and 9% in the US.
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the figures for the Western
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grew to about 15°o in around 199C, the figure for
Japan
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dipped to only 25% for much of
this
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period, before rising to almost 5% again at the present time. In spite of some fluctuation in the expected percentages, the proportion of older
people
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will probably continue to increase m the next two decades in the three
countries
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. A more dramatic rise is predicted between 2030 and 2040 in
Japan
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, by which time it is thought that the proportion of elderly
people
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will be similar in the three
countries
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.
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