the graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.

the graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.
The line graph given showcases the
amount
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number
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of tourist visits to a specific Island in
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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throughout 7
years
, from 2010 to 2017 in millions. Each line represents a place in which tourists stay. Clearly, there are more visitors who are staying on
island
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the island
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than the visitors who are staying on cruise ships in the first 5
years
. In 2010 and 2012, the
number
of tourists living on ships witnessed its lowest
number
which was a quarter of a
million
. Following those
years
, the numbers started rising. The amount ended up to be 2
million
in 2017. On the other side, the
number
of people staying on land in 2010 was a bit higher than the other
one
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three quarters
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of a
million
which is around 0.75
million
. After a bit of fluctuation, the
number
ceased to be 1.5
million
.
Basically
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Basically,
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it doubled throughout the 7
years
of time. The difference in the total
number
between 2010 and 2017 increased from 1
million
to 3.5
million
which is pretty impressive for an island in
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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