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The bar chart below shows how frequently people in USA are in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The bar chart below shows how frequently people in USA are in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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The bar chart illustrates the
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average
avarge
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average
 of
people
 who eat fast
food
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between
betweent
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between
 2003 and 2013
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. The highest
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flowed
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 by once or twice a month others were under a quarter In 2003
.once
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once
 a week was nearly 30%
however
 in 2006 the number of
people
 who eat fast
food
 increased to 33% and in 2013 the number of
people
 who
eat
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decrease
decreased
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decreased
 by 6% Once or twice a month
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people
peolpe
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people
 who eat fast
food
 was 30% in 2003 ,
however
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people
 who eat fast
food
 decreased by 5% in 2006 after that the
numper
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number
 of
people
 who eat fast
food
was
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rose quickly to nearly 33% In 2003,
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several
serveral
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several
 times a week the
numper
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number
 of
Pepele
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people
 who
eat
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 fast
food
 was around 17 %
however
people
is
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 eaten fast
food
 by20 %in 2006 after that the
numper
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number
 of
people
 decreased rapidly to 15% In 2003, a few times a year the
numper
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number
 of
people
 who eat fast
food
were
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made
same
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smae
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same
in
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 2006 and 2013 but in 2003 the number decreased by 2% In 2003 ,the
numper
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number
 of
people
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eat
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 fast
food
 remained
same
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in
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 2006 and 2013 but the
different
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 was in 2003 ,
people
 who
eat
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 every day was 3 %but
people
wasn't
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 eating anything never about 5%
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food, numper with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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