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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The map illustrates the possible construction of a supermarket in Garlsdon
town
 considering two different places where it could be settled.
Overall
, it is possible to see that indifferent of the place chosen for the construction, both
opitions
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options
 present the railway and main roads crossing the
area
, which could make
the
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access possible
by
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for
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poeple
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people
 from other cities. Garlsdon
town
 has 56,000 inhabitants which is divided among centre housing, countryside and industry
area
. The S1, the first option for the supermarket construction is
in
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 the northeast side, located in the countryside. Despite the localization, the
area
 counts on
transport
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a transport
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 system with main roads and railway running there.
Besides
 that, the place is located 12km
far
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away
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 from Hindon
Town
, which has a population of 10,000 people who can take some advantage of
this
 future facility. Considering the
implement
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 of a supermarket S2, the middle of
town
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the town
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 centre of Garlsdon nestled in
south
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the south
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 is
also
 an alternative.
Although
this
 region has no
trafficzone
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traffic zone
, it is surrounded by industry
area
, which allows people
go
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to go
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 there after work.
In addition
, there is a railway crossing the north side of the centre and
an
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a
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 housing
area
 in the south, which can be benefited by the new business.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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