The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
The map illustrates the possible construction of a supermarket in Garlsdon
town
considering two different places where it could be settled. Overall
, it is possible to see that indifferent of the place chosen for the construction, both opitions
present the railway and main roads crossing the Correct your spelling
options
area
, which could make the
access possible Correct article usage
apply
by
Change preposition
for
poeple
from other cities.
Garlsdon Correct your spelling
people
town
has 56,000 inhabitants which is divided among centre housing, countryside and industry area
. The S1, the first option for the supermarket construction is in
the northeast side, located in the countryside. Despite the localization, the Change preposition
on
area
counts on transport
system with main roads and railway running there. Correct article usage
a transport
Besides
that, the place is located 12km far
from Hindon Rephrase
away
Town
, which has a population of 10,000 people who can take some advantage of this
future facility.
Considering the implement
of a supermarket S2, the middle of Replace the word
implementation
town
centre of Garlsdon nestled in Add an article
the town
south
is Add an article
the south
also
an alternative. Although
this
region has no trafficzone
, it is surrounded by industry Correct your spelling
traffic zone
area
, which allows people go
there after work. Fix the infinitive
to go
In addition
, there is a railway crossing the north side of the centre and an
housing Change the article
a
area
in the south, which can be benefited by the new business.Submitted by carinabmurakami on
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