The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
The map illustrates the possible construction of a supermarket in Garlsdon
town
considering two different places where it could be settled.
Overall
, it is possible to see that indifferent of the place chosen for the construction, both
opitions
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options
present the railway and main roads crossing the
area
, which could make
the
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access possible
by
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for
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poeple
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people
from other cities. Garlsdon
town
has 56,000 inhabitants which is divided among centre housing, countryside and industry
area
. The S1, the first option for the supermarket construction is
in
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the northeast side, located in the countryside. Despite the localization, the
area
counts on
transport
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a transport
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system with main roads and railway running there.
Besides
that, the place is located 12km
far
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away
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from Hindon
Town
, which has a population of 10,000 people who can take some advantage of
this
future facility. Considering the
implement
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of a supermarket S2, the middle of
town
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the town
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centre of Garlsdon nestled in
south
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the south
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is
also
an alternative.
Although
this
region has no
trafficzone
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traffic zone
, it is surrounded by industry
area
, which allows people
go
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there after work.
In addition
, there is a railway crossing the north side of the centre and
an
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housing
area
in the south, which can be benefited by the new business.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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