Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem?
Biologists and environmentalists have been warning about the
increasingly
risks of extinction of some species around the world. Abrupt changes occurring in nature because of human activities have been causing damage in different ecosystems and their biodiversity is struggling with it. Considering the scenario, Change the adverb
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essay argue
some problems and possible solutions which can be done to diminish the situation.
Human beings have been expanding their domains and exploring different areas of the globe. Actions like building constructions, mineral exploitation, and logging could be faced as advancements Change the verb form
argues
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in
the
society, Correct article usage
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however
, negative impacts have been perceived in the
nature. Correct article usage
apply
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, many species have been
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the dam's
death
of local biodiversity, including plants and animals. In Add an article
the death
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plant
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plants
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the country, Belo Monte. Unfortunately, all that impact are result of Change preposition
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search
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economic growth.
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However
, there are some ways to diminish these increasing effects of destruction. Governments and companies around the world should lead the
society to find eco-friendly alternatives to economic development. Correct article usage
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In other words
, the state has the power of imposing
rules with strict ecological guidelines for companies. Change preposition
to impose
In addition
, applying fines for these
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those
ones which
do not follow the law is a way to avoid environmental crime.
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To conclude
, it is possible to see that the
human activity implicates in Correct article usage
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destruction
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the destruction
to
the environment and consequent extinction of species, Change preposition
of
nonetheless
, with effort if
is possible to minimize the effects and work to recover some of them.Correct your spelling
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