Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem?
Biologists and environmentalists have been warning about the
increasingly
risks of extinction of some species around the world. Abrupt changes occurring in nature because of human activities have been causing damage in different ecosystems and their biodiversity is struggling with it. Considering the scenario, Change the adverb
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some problems and possible solutions which can be done to diminish the situation.
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however
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, many species have been
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economic growth.
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, there are some ways to diminish these increasing effects of destruction. Governments and companies around the world should lead the
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destruction
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