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To learn a foreign language it is necessary to live in the country where it is spoken. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#language #country
In the modern era, foreign
language
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becomes
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 more and more vital because we are in
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 period. Some people agree that it is best to live abroad country to be able to learn that foreign language well. In my opinion, I disagree with
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 statement and the following graph
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 prove that. It is admitted that
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 living in
abroad
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a abroad
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 country is a good choice for language
leaners
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learners
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. If we can access
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their environment, the knowledge will
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 into our minds faster and more
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.It
is enhacing
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 understanding and fluency,
provides
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 constant exposure to it in various contexts. Living in their territory is
also
 a good way to know more about other cultures as
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well
wel
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well
 as customs so that we can
further
 nurture our love for our home country But in a period of social development like today,
that is
 really not necessary because there are many cutting-edge apps, online courses, and virtual reality environments
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 simulate immersive experiences to a certain extent.
Furthermore
, not everyone has enough economic conditions to travel abroad so it is
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 best way to
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a virtual apps
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 the above reasons, I think it is not necessary to go abroad to study with developed technology like today.
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  • accelerates learning
  • constant exposure
  • fluency
  • technology and resources
  • virtual reality environments
  • simulate
  • cultural understanding
  • nuances
  • colloquialisms
  • financial and logistical constraints
  • alternative methods
  • personal journey
  • immersion
  • self-study
  • formal education
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