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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reportung the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reportung the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented diagram illustrates the changes
of
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 a public library over twenty years, from 20 years ago to nowadays.
Overall
, it can be seen that there
has
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have
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 been
much
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many
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 changes over the given time. In the past there were only six different parts in the library;
however
, these days, some sections
such
 as a Café, self-service machines, and a computer
room
 were added to the building. In detail, on the left side of the
entrance
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entrance,
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 the reading
room
 was replaced by a computer
room
 which is next to the all reference
books
 sector.
Moreover
, a door from
this
 section opens to the children’s fiction
books
 part where there are sofas and storytelling events occur in
this
 part.Back
then
,
this
 section was used for computer games.
Furthermore
, in the middle of the central library, there were two tables and some chairs which were removed in the new
renovating
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. On the right side of the entrance, there was an enquiry desk which is now replaced by a café and close to
this
 part there are three self-service machines for public use.
Additionally
, an information desk was added to the building, and
then
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the
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 adult fiction
books
 sector was relocated from the left to the right close to the information desk. Meanwhile, a lecture
room
 was constructed in the location of children’s
books
 .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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