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You have seen am advertisemen from a couple , who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a Year. Write a letter to a couple. In your letter: •explain why you think you would be suitable for the job •say what else you could do forthe family •give your reasons for the wanting job

Dear Sir or Madam I am writing
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 letter to apply for the job as a
teacher
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 to teach your
children
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 in your home that
l
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 had read from local newspaper recently . I would really appreciate it if you would give
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 chance of teaching to your two
children
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 for a Year. I would like to work at your home as a
teacher
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that
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 would enable me to work with your
children
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 closely.
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 way,
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 would be able to best take care of your
children
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 and on the
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 hand teach valuable knowledge . As
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per
 my
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 resume , my
experiense
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experience
 and accomplishments match the requirements of
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 position.
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 am a recent university
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graduate
, my teaching and caring will make me
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excelent
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excellent
teacher
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 . During the two years ,
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studying at Oxford
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,
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initated
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initiated
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 extensive
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improvements
 that
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resulted
 in
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garnering
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 30 more clients for the period ending. I feel that
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 am the most suitable
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candidate
 for
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 job because of my ambition and drive to
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 change . It would be
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 honour to start my career as a
teacher
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 and
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 am confident that
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 will be
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 asset to the business. Yours faithfully Lily Will

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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure your letter follows a clear logical structure by organizing it into distinct paragraphs; introduction, body paragraphs explaining your suitability, additional skills, and reasons for wanting the job, and a conclusion.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use clear and relevant topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to guide the reader through your argument or discussion.
Task Achievement
Directly address each criterion listed in the prompt within separate paragraphs to fully complete the task. Mention your teaching method, any special skills or qualifications explicitly, and elaborate on how these make you suitable for the job.
Task Achievement
Maintain a professional yet personable writing tone throughout the letter. Use formal language but don't hesitate to express genuine enthusiasm and personal interest in the job.
General Advice
Proofread your letter for spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors. Also, ensure that names and places are spelled correctly (e.g., Oxford University) and consistent terminology is used throughout.
Task Achievement
Consider elaborating on what 'else' you could do for the family, as requested in the prompt. This could include, but not be limited to, cultural exchange, helping with homework in other subjects, or participating in household activities.
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