IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The frame above illustrates figures in three states in the United States. The features are age, average income per
person
Use synonyms
, and
population
Use synonyms
 beneath the line of poverty. The states are
California
Use synonyms
,
Utah
Use synonyms
 and
Florida
Use synonyms
. Concerning
on aged
Change preposition
age
show examples
,
Utah
Use synonyms
 has
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 higher percentual of youngers, about 28% of their
population
Use synonyms
,
whereas
Linking Words
Florida
Use synonyms
 has
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 higher percentual of people over 60 years (23%).
Utah
Use synonyms
 has almost a third of
their
Correct pronoun usage
its
show examples
population
Use synonyms
 over 60 years
when
Correct word choice
old when
show examples
 compared to
Florida
Use synonyms
.
California
Use synonyms
 depicts intermediate numbers in both ranges (under 18 and over 60). Analysing the average amount earned per
person
Use synonyms
,
California
Use synonyms
 has the major value ($ 23.000), followed by
Florida
Use synonyms
 ($ 22.000), and
Utah
Use synonyms
 ($ 17.000) is in the
last
Linking Words
 position among the three administrative regions. The difference between
California
Use synonyms
 and
Florida
Use synonyms
 is only $1.000. In spite of the fact that
California
Use synonyms
 has a good income per
person
Use synonyms
,
this
Linking Words
 state presents the worst percentage of people below
poverty
Correct article usage
the poverty
show examples
 line (16%).
On the other hand
Linking Words
,
Utah
Use synonyms
 has a lower mean income per
person
Use synonyms
,
however
Linking Words
, presents a better performance on
population
Use synonyms
 above poverty, about 9%, when compared to
California
Use synonyms
 and
Florida
Use synonyms
 (12%).

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words person, population, california, utah, florida with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: