It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. What are advantages and disadvantages of this development?

Nowadays,
due to
the
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technological advancement and human
curiosity
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curiosity,
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many people
likes
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scientists and tourists
makes
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a
trip
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trips
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to some remote natural
environment
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environments
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,
such
as the South Pole.
Although
there are a few drawbacks
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be happen
causes
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by human activity by travelling to
this
place,
i
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believe the advantages certainly
outweight
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outweigh
them.
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Task Achievement
Expand on the advantages and disadvantages of travelling to remote natural environments, such as the South Pole, in greater detail. Your essay should offer specific examples and a more in-depth analysis of both sides to fully address the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the overall coherence by organizing your essay into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific point. Start with an introduction that presents your main argument, followed by separate paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages, and conclude with a summarizing statement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance your essay by including a conclusion that reiterates your main points and your stance regarding the issue. This helps in providing a complete structure to your response.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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