The graph below shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010

The graph below shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phone,

national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010
The information about how much money
spent
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on different kinds of
services
by
a customers
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customers
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is illustrated by a given linear representation in the period of 9 years. The data has been calibrated in numbers.
To sum up
, it can be vividly manifested that the figures
of
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national fixed line
services
experienced a downward trend throughout the whole period,
While
cell
phones
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services
can be seen with an upward trend. Upon initial examination of the chart, it is evident that a slight incline was noticed
on
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wealth which was invested yearly on abroad
services
from 2001 to 2003 which was 260
dollars
and 310
dollars
, respectively.
Further
analysis reveals that in 2004, a gradual decrease of around 15
dollars
was seen in the cash outflowed on international calls,
Whereas
the finance remained constant between 2004 and 2008 at 300
dollars
, each year. Analyzing the data in more detail, there was a
steadily
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increment of 100
dollars
in the phone facilities from 2001 to 2003.
Aftewards
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Afterwards
, a significant rise could be apparent in the amount of capital expended on phone provisions from 2004 until 2011. Probing ahead, from 2001 to 2011, the data of national fixed line benefits showed a consistent downward trend, the
fomer
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former
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was 700
dollars
and the latter was 400
dollars
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words services, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • annual
  • fixed-line services
  • consumer preferences
  • technological advancements
  • economic factors
  • speculate
  • trends
  • notable change
  • shifts in consumer behavior
  • innovation
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