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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graph illustrates how many tourists visited a
ceartain
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certain
Cribbean
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Caribbean
 island from 2010 to 2017. On the whole, there was an increase in the
number
 of
visiters
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visitors
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 in the iland during the period. One of the features to note is that the total
number
 of
people
 visiting the iland increased
thryoughout
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throughout
 the period. More specifically, there
was
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were
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 1
million
people
 in 2010, and
then
, rose to a staggering 3.5
million
people
 by the end of the period in 2017. The second point to note is that
vitsitors
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visitors
 staying on
cruse
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cruise
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 ships was
also
 increasing. Looking more closely, the
number
 of
people
 fell slightly from 2011 at 0.5
million
 to around 0.25
million
, but after that, increased to 2
million
 in 2017.
Interestinglly
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Interestingly
, the
number
 of
visiters
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visitors
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 staying on
iland
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Iland
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 had not
change
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changed
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 from 2013 to 2017. Specifically, it rose from
the
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a
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 low of about 0.75
million
 in 2010 to
1.5million
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1.5 million
 in 2013,but from 2013 to 2017, the
number
 was almost the same at 1.5
million
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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