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Some people believe that a significant difference between a parent’s age and their child's age is a good thing. Do you think the advantages of a significant age gap outweigh the disadvantages?

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I guess
this
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 is something good because the
parents
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they
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apply
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have
to
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 much information
with
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about
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live
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life
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 and how they fix any problem
as well as
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 they can know what
children
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 need
overall
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, should the difference between
parents
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 and
children
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 the gap don't be very much they should things how many
day
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days
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 stay in
live
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,
furthermore
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 the advantage the
parents
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 have
solution
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a solution
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 with any problem with
children
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 and how they can make the
children
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 happy among other what should they do and should
no
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apply
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don't
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 I see
Significant
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a Significant
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 age, gap something can live with him and they he is good for
parents
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 not for the
children
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introduction conclusion present
Start your essay with a clear introduction that presents your opinion on the topic. This helps readers understand your stance from the beginning.
logical structure
Use paragraphs to organize your essay. Each paragraph should explore a specific idea or argument related to the topic. This will improve the logical structure of your essay.
supported main points
Support your points with specific examples or evidence. This makes your arguments more convincing and relevant.
complete response
Ensure that your essay directly addresses the question. Clearly discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of a significant age gap between parents and children, and make a reasoned argument about whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
clear comprehensive ideas
Strive for clarity in your ideas. Make sure each sentence contributes to the argument or point you are making. This will help your essay to be more coherent and easy to understand.
relevant specific examples
Use specific examples to illustrate your points. This helps to make your arguments more concrete and persuasive.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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