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You are planning to go and study English at a school overseas. You would like some information about their courses. Ask about the school Say what kind of accommodation you want Mention any special requests you have (for example diet)

#study #english #school #information #courses #accommodation #requests #diet
Dear Sir or Madam, The reason why
l
 am addressing you is that
l
 want to ask a few questions about the English
school
 and
also
l
 want to ask important information about accommodation. Regarding my questions
first,
l
 want to know the duration of the course. The next
things
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 is about the price and advantages.
Beside
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 that,
l
 am going to know
this
school
 can accept old people. I hope
will
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apply
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that my accommodation
want
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will
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 to a bit bigger attractive and cozy room. And
also
l
 want to there are all
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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, kitchen, bedroom, and study place. Again, I want to know about
meals
. Because
l
 have been
illing
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killing
 since childhood so
l
 want to eat special diet
meals
. I do not eat all
meals
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the meals
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 so
l
 want to know some information about
in
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apply
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your English
school
meals
. I hope you will
answers
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answer
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 all my questions regarding the
school
 and reply
my
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to my
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 letter as soon as possible. Thank you for your attention. Yours faithfully, Bakhriddinova Sitora
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introduction conclusion
Be sure to include an introduction that clearly outlines your reason for writing, and a conclusion that summarizes your main points or expresses a final thought. Both elements help to frame your letter and make its purpose clear.
logical structure
Organize your ideas clearly by grouping them into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of your inquiry. Start with general questions about the course before moving on to accommodation and special requirements.
supported main points
Support your main points by explaining why they are important to you. For example, mention why you are concerned about diet or why adequate study space is necessary for you.
clear comprehensive ideas
Clearly state your questions or requests to ensure that your letter is easily understood. Avoid redundant phrases and focus on making each sentence contribute to your letter's overall purpose.
relevant specific examples
Provide specific examples of what you are looking for, such as mentioning any dietary restrictions or particular types of equipment you need in your accommodation. This makes it easier for the recipient to address your needs.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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