Some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the hosting nation. Others believe that these events are mainly a large unjustifiable expense. To what extebt do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that international champion sports are
unjustifiable
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expenditure of the hosting
country
.
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, others think
this
can be
the
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good chance to perform qualities of the hosting
country
. In
this
following essay, I will elaborate
why
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I agree with the latest statement.
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Holding
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By holding
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international events, especially a
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sports
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sport
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sports
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turnament
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tournament
which has
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the
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a
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the
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biggest
devotee
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will provide many benefits for
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the hosting
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hosting
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the hosting
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country
. It is not only providing happiness
of
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to
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their fans, but
also
can
make
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give
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the hosting
country
a chance to show their home culture to the world, and
as a result
, it
effects
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the economy of the hosting
country
.
For example
, before the
event
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event,
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many
tourist
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tourists
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will explore and visit the local area and eventually,
this
is the time they can see the local culture and society, so
then
they may have a plan to
visiting
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this
country
in the future.
Additionally
, being a host
country
can
also
increase the economy of the
country
from tourist
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
, food and beverage and
also
souvenirs.
Consequently
,
this
can profit
host
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the host
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country
. On the other side, these events are mainly a large unjustifiable cost.
For instance
, it will create massive developments for supporting the event which may not constantly
use
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by the local people in the future. In conclusion, International
sport
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sports
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events should be
positive
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a positive
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movement of the hosting
country
without unjustifiable expenditure.
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