The popularity of online education has grown significantly in recent years. Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

Over the
last
few years, online
education
has
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importance in the level,
such
as the popularity in some countries.
While
some people strongly support the opinion that
this
is
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for
children
there are other people who think that it is
negative
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impact
to
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young generations. In
this
essay, l will discuss both
positive
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and negative
side
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of
this
and draw a conclusion. On the one hand, online
education
has
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very significant,
convenient
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and convenient
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for
children
and
also
it is possible quality
education
for students.
Beside
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that,
this
course a little cheaper and quality are should than other
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communication or lessons.
That is
, students can see repeat topics in the online
education
. From my personal point of view, all individuals have been seeing lessons
their
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free time, at home and
other
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places.
That is
, they do homework anywhere.
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,
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population can not go to long places for
education
every day
as well as
inconvenience.
As a result
, they
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from
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quality amenities,
cheaper
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and cheaper
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education
and
this
the
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best way of
study
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.
On the other hand
, other people argue that pupils can not enough study in
the
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online
education
because they do not want to study
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language and new skills. Teachers do not over the control
their
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users.
Consequently
, pupils and crazy
children
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job
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in the future by
waste
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time.
For instance
,
everyone
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person do not homework
in
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the
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time because they believe that teachers are not shouting for
their
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do
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homework. In short, online
education
has
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not control
children
. In conclusion, online
education
has grown significantly in recent years and
this
situation is
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doors
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to opportunity
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opportunity
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opportunities
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for all individuals. I believe that online
education
will bring
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opportunities
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