Some people believe that it is better to get advice from old people compared to young people. Do you agree or disagree with this stuation?
Some
people
think it is best to get advice
from old people
compared to adolescent people
. I both agree and disagree with this
opinion
. Although
old people
have better opinion
and Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
advice
than young people
these day
, young Change the determiner
this day
these days
people
can also
have better opinion
than old Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
people
.
Some people
's opinion
old people
's advice
is good from young people
but old people
is not think
modern and they Change the verb form
do not think
are not know
modern Change the verb form
do not know
stuation
so they are giving only historical Correct your spelling
situation
advice
and also
their advice
is not interinging
to young Correct your spelling
interesting
people
due t to their advice
is very historical an uncomfortable to modern
world. Add an article
the modern
Fox
example, in Correct your spelling
For
the
America in old Correct article usage
apply
people
is
not work at Verb problem
do
important
job, local Add an article
an important
people
will not ask advice
from Change preposition
for advice
they
because old Change the pronoun
them
people
is work
Change the verb form
work
important
job their Correct article usage
an important
advice
is modern besides
that, comfortable to
young Change preposition
for
people
so from my prospective
all Correct your spelling
perspective
human
have to work at Fix the agreement mistake
humans
important
job.
Nowadays, all Add an article
an important
the important
people
is
asking Change the verb form
are
advice
, if come bad situation Change preposition
for advice
to
their hard, Change preposition
apply
icpecially
Correct your spelling
especially
people
think old people
Change noun form
people's
advice
is better from
other Change preposition
than
people
Change noun form
people's
as well as
the live past world and they saw
Wrong verb form
see
differently
problems that know all thing. Change the adverb
different
Moreover
old Add a comma
Moreover,
people
's advice
is helpful to young children. If I face bad problems or bad
position, I will ask Correct article usage
a bad
advice
from my grandparents and old close relationship, their Change preposition
for advice
advice
is important to my life. For instance
, If I have debt money from rich mans
, I will ask Correct your spelling
men
advice
Change preposition
for advice
Change preposition
on my
my
close Change preposition
from my
relitionship
and they give Correct your spelling
relationship
relationships
right
Correct article usage
the right
ways
Fix the agreement mistake
way
to
me so I ask Change preposition
apply
advice
from old Change preposition
for advice
people
.
In conclusion, at the presentold
Correct your spelling
present old
presented
people
and young Change noun form
people's
people
Add a comma
people,
advice
is important to our lifestyle, if you have modern advice
you ask from young people
but you have to
historical Change preposition
apply
advice
you ask from old people
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