The popularity of online education has growing significantly in recent years. Do you think this development is a positive or negative development.

In the modern world, almost
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
all
country
Fix the agreement mistake
countries
show examples
development
Replace the word
develop
show examples
online
education
and online teachers so all
children
choose online
course
Fix the agreement mistake
courses
show examples
. From my
prospective
Correct your spelling
perspective
show examples
this
development
to positive
too
Rephrase
apply
show examples
and negative too because in online
course
Fix the agreement mistake
courses
show examples
teacher
Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
show examples
is
Verb problem
do
show examples
not control
homework
and
children
is
Verb problem
do
show examples
not
writing
Wrong verb form
write
show examples
homework
but online
education
is comfortable to some people
due to
if you
gave
Verb problem
do
show examples
not
enough
Add a missing verb
have enough
show examples
time
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
go to
course
Add an article
the course
a course
show examples
, you will choose online
education
. On the one hand, in the
country
Add a comma
country,
show examples
some local humans are not finding free time
to
Change preposition
for
show examples
offline
course
Fix the agreement mistake
courses
show examples
so they are choosing online
education
and they are take
result
Fix the agreement mistake
results
show examples
from online
teacher
Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
show examples
. If you choose
online
Add an article
an online
the online
show examples
course
, you have to
taking
Verb problem
get
show examples
better
result
Fix the agreement mistake
results
show examples
from
offline
Add an article
the offline
an offline
show examples
course
because you learn at
you
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
home
this
situation is comfortable
to
Change preposition
for
show examples
you.
Besides
that, online
course
Fix the agreement mistake
courses
show examples
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
cheaper
from
Change preposition
than
show examples
offline
course
Fix the agreement mistake
courses
show examples
. In my opinion, online
teacher
Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
show examples
has got many
expressing
Replace the word
expressions
show examples
fro
Correct your spelling
for
show examples
children
.
For example
, in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
America, almost all
children
choose online
teacher
Replace the word
teaching
show examples
because
this
position
comfortable
Add a missing verb
is comfortable
show examples
to
Change preposition
for
show examples
all people and
also
many
humn
Correct your spelling
humans
is using
laptop
Fix the agreement mistake
laptops
show examples
and
phone
Fix the agreement mistake
phones
show examples
for
education
.
On the other hand
, in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
poor
country
is
not
Rephrase
no
show examples
development
online
education
as well as
in the
country
, network is not
connect
Verb problem
apply
show examples
good so poor people choose
offline
course
Fix the agreement mistake
courses
show examples
however
offline
course
Fix the agreement mistake
courses
show examples
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
very helpful to
children
because if you choose
offline
course
Fix the agreement mistake
courses
show examples
, you
well
Correct your spelling
will
show examples
not
using
Wrong verb form
use
show examples
phone
Correct article usage
a phone
show examples
,
this
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
position
benefit
Change the verb form
benefits
show examples
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
your health.
Moreover
, your
teacher
my
Correct your spelling
may
show examples
control over
from
Change preposition
apply
show examples
your
homework
and
you
Correct word choice
if you
show examples
have some questions, you will
asking
Wrong verb form
ask
show examples
your
teacher
.
For instance
, if your
teacher
control
Change the verb form
controls
show examples
your
homework
and you ask questions from your
teacher
, you will
take
Verb problem
get
show examples
good
result
Fix the agreement mistake
results
show examples
in the future in
additional
Replace the word
addition
show examples
you may learn other things from
teacher
Add an article
the teacher
a teacher
show examples
. In conclusion, nowadays in the
developmenthcountry
Correct your spelling
development country
online
education
is increasing year by year
this
situation has positive
delopment
Correct your spelling
development
and negative
development
.
Submitted by soglomovsarvar on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Coherence and Cohesion
Consider structuring your essay more effectively by introducing clear paragraphs for your introduction, main body discussions, and conclusion. This will help enhance the logical flow of your arguments.
Task Achievement
In your introduction, clearly state your viewpoint on whether you believe the development is positive or negative. This sets a clear direction for your essay.
Task Achievement
Elaborate on your points with more specific examples and explanations. This will make your arguments more persuasive and comprehensive.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on punctuation and sentence structuring to improve readability and avoid run-on sentences.
Task Achievement
Attempt to maintain a balance in discussing both sides of the argument if you're aiming to present a balanced view. Make sure to conclude with a strong summary of your stance.
General
Consider practicing and improving your English proficiency, focusing on grammar, vocabulary, and spelling, to enhance the overall quality of your writing.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: