You are planning to go and study English at as school overseas.You would like some information about their courses. Write a letter to the school.In you letter ask about the school say what kind of accommodation you want mention any special requests you have (for example diet)I

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Dear Sir or Madam, The reason why I am addressing you is that I

want

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want to

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ask about the

school

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as well as

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Correct pronoun usage

apply

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say

comfortable

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the comfortable

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accommodation

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which

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in which

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I will stay.

Firstly

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,I want to know the

school

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courses and system.I have heard that there are

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apply

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numerous courses and

also

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unusual teaching methods.I would appreciate it if you could provide me with

further

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details about the

school

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Secondly

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,I desire comfortable

accommodation

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to stay and do

hometask

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homework

Due to

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this

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,I want to improve my speaking skills

as well as

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my other skills.

In addition

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accommodation

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full

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is full

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of equipment which I will necessary.One more thing that I have to mention is that

accommodation

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that

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, that

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is to say, it would be nice located near the

school

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Lastly

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,I am

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a vegeterian

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vegeterian

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vegetarian

person so,I will need some foods which let the

vegeterian

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vegetarian

vegetarians

eat.I think you will provide me

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this

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with this

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situation too. I am really forward to hearing from you soon and thank you for your teamwork. Best regards, Khamidov Ali.

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Coherence & Cohesion

Ensure each paragraph is focused on a single idea, clearly separating your requests and inquiries about the school, the accommodation specifics, and dietary requirements. This will enhance clarity and coherence of the letter.

Task Achievement

Expand on the details of your inquiries and requests. For example, specify what aspects of the school's courses and teaching methods you're interested in, describe what constitutes 'comfortable accommodation' for you, and list specific dietary requirements. Providing more detailed information will improve the completeness of your response.

General

Work on grammar, punctuation, and sentence structuring to enhance readability and effectiveness of communication. Consider using tools or resources to practice English writing skills.

General

Maintain a polite and formal tone throughout the letter as you did well with 'Dear Sir or Madam' and 'Best regards.' This is suitable for the context and purpose of your letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

160 words

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You are planning to go and study English at as school overseas.You would like some information about their courses. Write a letter to the school.In you letter ask about the school say what kind of accommodation you want mention any special requests you have (for example diet)I

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