News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to write in newspapers.what factors influnce these decision? do you think we become used to bad news? should more good news be reported

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Nowadays we can rarely find any authentic sources of news. Companies have commercialized data to muster attention and views. The entire business is monetized and viewers are emotionally manipulated. I strongly believe we as viewers are being

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bad news. The news business is in control of only

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of people and companies which regulate the pipeline.

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Introduction & Conclusion

Expand the essay to include an introduction that clearly presents the topic, and a conclusion that summarizes the main points and your stance.

Balanced Perspective

Consider exploring both sides of the argument for a more balanced perspective, including possible reasons behind the focus on bad news and discussing the potential impact of this.

Completeness

Increase the length of your essay to fully address all aspects of the prompt, including discussing the factors influencing news editors' decisions, reflecting on our desensitization to bad news, and arguing for or against the inclusion of more good news.

Supporting Evidence

Support your claims with specific examples or evidence to strengthen your argument.

Coherence & Cohesion

Enhance the coherence of your essay by organizing it into clear paragraphs each focusing on a specific point, and using linking words to ensure smooth transitions between ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

57 words

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News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to write in newspapers.what factors influnce these decision? do you think we become used to bad news? should more good news be reported

Include an introduction and conclusion

Tobacco should be treated as illegal like other drugs. Smoking has not a single positive issue, but lots of negative effect. Therefore it should be banned.

While people flood into big cities to seek jobs and happy life, there is a tendency for people to move out. What problems do big cities have? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Some people think that academical subjects math,physic and history should be important than practical subjects Discuss both views and give your own opinions?

it is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (dinosaur, dodo) there is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?