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You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter *Explain why you want to take time off work *Give details of the amount of time you need *Suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

#company #time #work #manager #*explain #*give #amount #*suggest
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing you a letter to inform you that I will not be available for 3 days or more time because of my health issues. My health is suddenly
being
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bad. And, I have felt like I was
dieing
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dying
. So, I called the ambulance. They said I have
problem
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 with my stomach.
Due to
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I
drunk
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 goat's milk yesterday. I
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 allergic to goat's milk since I was
child
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. But I forgot about that yesterday. To do so, I might need three days which are Monday, Tuesday and Thursday. Maybe you say it is little time for being healthy, but don't worry about
this
. Because I had like that happen two years ago,
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felt happy three days later.
While
 I am recovering my partner Molly will help
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 projects. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully. Zuhra
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure you provide a clear introduction, body paragraphs discussing specific points, and a conclusion for improved structure.
Coherence & Cohesion
Introduce one idea per paragraph and use cohesive devices to logically connect ideas.
Coherence & Cohesion
Acknowledge the manager directly with 'Dear [Manager's Name]' if possible, for a more personalised greeting.
Task Response
Clarify the reason for your absence more objectively. Avoid overly dramatic expressions such as 'I felt like I was dying' for a professional tone.
Task Response
Detail how your absence will be managed more extensively. Mentioning Molly is helpful, but elaborate on how she will cover specific duties.
Task Response
Adopt a more formal writing style for professional communication. Avoid casual phrases and ensure correct spelling and grammar.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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