Some people say that we do not need printed news paper anymore. To what extent do yo agree or disagree?State your opinion.

I
am not agree
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that
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human society
do
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does
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not need printed
newspaper
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newspapers
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anymore because of the consideration
from
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of
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the
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accessibility, reading
habit
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habits
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, and employment aspects.
First,
the accessibility of gaining the unprinted
newspaper
, which means the e-copy. There are many people,
such
as the elderly,
underpreviling
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underpricing
, and special education needs students,
have
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who have
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difficulties
on
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visting
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visiting
the Internet or using devices.
For example
, they may not be able to
affort
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afford
the
electornic
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electronic
devices.
Hence
, they still need the printed
news paper
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newspaper
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.
Second,
the reading
habit
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habits
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of different people. We have different reading
habit
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habits
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, some are more
confortable
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comfortable
when they read
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printed
newspaper
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newspapers
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, especially the elderly.
Insead
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Instead
of learning how to use the devices, their visual abilities are declined. The printed
newspaper
is more friendly to the elderly,
making
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the reason
of
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for
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keeping the printed
news paper
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newspaper
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.
Last
be not least, the employment aspects. The industry of printed
newspaper
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newspapers
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provided a large of
job
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the job
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requirement
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requirements
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to
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society. Some people had been working
for
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in
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this
industry for
the
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their
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whole life. If they lose
this
job, they may not be able to find other
jods
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jobs
or have
the
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a
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stable income.
Therefore
, it is
having
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a need to
contuie
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continue
contain
the printed
newspaper
.
Although
some may
said
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say
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that it is the trend of having
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unprinted
newspaper
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newspapers
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, there are still
group
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groups
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of
stakeholder
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stakeholders
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need
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that need
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to be
concerned
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considered
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.
While
the need
of
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for
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printed
newspaper
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newspapers
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is existed
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exists
has existed
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,
this
tradition should not
be disappeared
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disappear
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.
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