Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill. Do you agree or disagree?

It is true that
education
plays a crucial role in human lives. Some say that
from
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all primary
education
to
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universities
focus
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focuses
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more theoretical-based on
education
instead
of learning practical
skill
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skills
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. I strongly agree with
this
statement because
practical
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practicality
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is required for getting employment and it affects innovative and creative ideas.
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essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. To commence
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, indeed
education
system teaches more
theory
subjects with less
of
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practical knowledge,
thus
, many
students
are unemployed after completing degree courses because
education
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institutional
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teaches
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ninety per cent of
theory
and
rest
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the rest
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of the valance of practical, so they do not have any experience in practical
skills
.
For example
, indeed 40% of engineers are unemployed in Sri Lanka
due to
a lack of practical exposure even if they have good academic scores. Needless to say, a large number of
students
suffer to get employment opportunities after completing degree courses because
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they have more theoretical knowledge rather than practical
skill
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skills
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.
Furthermore
,
students
study
already proven
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scientific research and facts rather than new ones.
This
cause
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causes
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learner's creative and innovative ideas to come up to find new innovations.
For example
, all schools teach Newton's science law from school to college in science classes rather than new scientists and researchers,
consequently
,
students
are masters in
theory
but what about practical
skills
.
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In addition
, in
this
fast-paced era, everyone should have a unique and creative idea
otherwise
they will suffer
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this
competitive world
while
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traditional
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based on
education
system which is more
theory
less
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and less
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practical
skills
.
To conclude
, learning more
theory
and less practical knowledge can cause
students
' employment opportunities
along with
innovative and creative ideas to come up in
this
competitive world.
Therefore
, I strongly agree that from school to University
education
covers more
theory
and less spending time on practical
skills
.
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task achievement
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • education system
  • curriculum
  • factual knowledge
  • practical skills
  • critical thinking
  • problem solving
  • academic achievement
  • real-world application
  • balance
  • integration
  • learning outcomes
  • employment opportunities
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