Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that
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plays a crucial role in human lives. Some say that
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all primary
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universities
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more theoretical-based on
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instead
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of learning practical
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. I strongly agree with
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statement because
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is required for getting employment and it affects innovative and creative ideas.
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essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. To commence
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, indeed
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system teaches more
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subjects with less
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practical knowledge,
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, many
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are unemployed after completing degree courses because
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education
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institutional
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teaches
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ninety per cent of
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and
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the rest
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of the valance of practical, so they do not have any experience in practical
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, indeed 40% of engineers are unemployed in Sri Lanka
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a lack of practical exposure even if they have good academic scores. Needless to say, a large number of
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suffer to get employment opportunities after completing degree courses because
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they have more theoretical knowledge rather than practical
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skills
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.
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,
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study
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scientific research and facts rather than new ones.
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cause
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causes
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learner's creative and innovative ideas to come up to find new innovations.
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, all schools teach Newton's science law from school to college in science classes rather than new scientists and researchers,
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,
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are masters in
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but what about practical
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In addition
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, in
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fast-paced era, everyone should have a unique and creative idea
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they will suffer
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competitive world
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while
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traditional
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based on
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system which is more
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less
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and less
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practical
skills
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.
To conclude
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, learning more
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and less practical knowledge can cause
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' employment opportunities
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innovative and creative ideas to come up in
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competitive world.
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, I strongly agree that from school to University
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covers more
theory
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and less spending time on practical
skills
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.

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task achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure that your essay provides a more detailed exploration of ideas. While you have articulated your opinion and provided examples, delve deeper into how practical skills can be integrated into the education system and the specific benefits this integration would bring.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, consider varying your sentence structures and connecting phrases to enhance the flow of ideas. Although your essay has a logical structure, using a wider range of linking words can improve the reader's experience by making transitions between ideas smoother and more natural.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • education system
  • curriculum
  • factual knowledge
  • practical skills
  • critical thinking
  • problem solving
  • academic achievement
  • real-world application
  • balance
  • integration
  • learning outcomes
  • employment opportunities
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