The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The
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graph
provdes
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provides
information about the
percentage
of
household
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households
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with electrical
appliamces
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appliances
and the number of
houres
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hours
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per
week
spent by people doing
home work
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homework
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between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
, the
percentage
of ownership of
electrial
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electrical
electric
appliances showed increased between 1920 and 2019,
while
the number of
houres
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hours
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that
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spent
of
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housework decreased significantly. looking first at
percentage
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the percentage
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of households, the
percentage
of electrical appliances increased for all types during the
peroid
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period
. There was
slight
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a slight
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increased
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in
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refrigerator
from 0 in 1920 to 90 in 1960,
then
contuine
increaed
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increased
to reach 100 in 1980.
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, the
percentage
remain
same
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till
the
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2019. Vacuum cleaner shows a similar trend, there was
rise
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a rise
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from 30 % in 1920 to 100% in 2000,
then
the
percentage
level out between 2000 and 2019.
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,
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the Waching
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Waching
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Washing
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machine
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machines
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showed
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an increased
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increased
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in the first 30 years, before filled from 1960 to 1980 to just under 60%.
However
this
figure well to just above
of
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70% in 2019. The number of hours per
week
that people spent doing housework showed dramatically decreased from 50
houres
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hours
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per
week
in 1920 to just above 10
houres
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hours
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per
week
in 2019.
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