As Earth runs out of natural resources, we have to started to look to space for solutions. However, some people argue that this is wrong thing to do, and instead we should look for alternative solutions here on Earth. To what extent to do you agree with them? What alternative might there be to exploiting space for natural resources?

People
have started to look to
space
for the
solution
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our
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earth
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running out of natural resources problem.
Although
, some
people
think that it is not
a
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right
thing to do. They think that
people
should look for
alternatives
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solutions on our
Earth
. What statement is actually
right
? Are there any
alternatives
that might avoid exploiting
space
for natural
recourses
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resources
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? Personally, I do agree with both statements,
although
it may be a little bit more complicated
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it seems. In my opinion, both of those solutions are quite logical.
Firstly
people
should try to find an alternative
solution
on the
earth
, as it is probably easier and faster.
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to find any
solution
in
space
, won’t only take a lot of time to find, but
also
to make it come true, as currently our technologies are not that advanced to travel from planet to planet in order to test different materials that can be used as an alternative. And by
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I mean not a couple of years, but a couple of decades or maybe even centuries! So currently it is probably
right
to find
alternatives
on our
earth
, over than in
space
. But
also
the fact that those
alternatives
we may find are not infinite either. So that means that in the future
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the
space
solution
is not a bad one either.
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, in
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nutshell
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I can say that both statements are
right
in their own way, but they definitely have their own downsides, which are quite crucial for humankind.
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