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TO SUMMERISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES AND MAKE COMPARISIONS WHERE RELEVANT.

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The given bar chart illustrates in terms of ten nation's
production
 and
consumption
 of
electricity
 in 2014. From an
overall
 perspective, China
almost
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equal
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 amount of
consumption
 and generated
of
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electricity
while
 Korea.Rep was the least
production
 and
consumption
.
In contrast
, Germany's
consumption
 as
exceed
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as than
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production
. In detail, China almost had the same amount of
production
 and
consumption
 of
electricity
, at 5,398 and 5.322
as well as
 China was the majority of these both as compared to the given other nations in the given period.
Similarly
, Russia
also
 had
the
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almost as equal as these
both
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, which accounts for 1,057 and 1,038 respectively. The United States
was
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 the second-largest usage and generated
electricity
, which is 3,866 and 4,099 respectively.
In contrast
, Germany used the majority of
electricity
 than
production
, at 582.5 and 5.26.6. Korea.Rep was the least amount of
electricity
 produced and used as compared to the given nations, which accounts for 485.1 and 449.5.
Other
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 countries
of
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Japan, India, Canada, France and Brazil
we're
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,
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 generated and
consumption
 were
lower
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at lower
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level
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 and it was not any significant changes.
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