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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart demonstrates the various situations of
coffee
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 and tea consumption in five Australian
cities
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 during the
last
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 4 weeks,including
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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,Brisbane,
Adelaide
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 and Hobart. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective,it is apparent that the proportions of residents who prefer having
coffee
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 or tea in cafe stores are highest in the majority of
cities
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 except
Adelaide
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,which is merely slightly lower than the people who choose instant
coffee
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.In contrast,the figures of citizens purchasing fresh
coffee
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 are always at the bottom. In terms of buying fresh
coffee
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,it seems that
this
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 kind of drinking habit is not so popular in all five
cities
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.It is noteworthy that there are two groups of
cities
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 that have similar rates.One group is
Sydney
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 and
Melbourne
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 which have relatively higher percentages,accounting for 44% and 42.5% respectively.In comparison,only about 34% and 34.5% of citizens choose to drink fresh
coffee
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 in Brisbane and
Adelaide
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 separately. As for instant
coffee
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,it is a mediocre choice in most cases.What’s more,their data reaches a similar situation and there is not a huge gap among these
cities
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.It is Hobart,Brisbane,
Adelaide
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,
Melbourne
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 and
Sydney
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arranging
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 from high to low and their gap is about 2%~3%.Hobat reaches the peak of 54% and
Sydney
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 bottoms out at 45%. When it comes to consuming
coffee
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 or tea in cafe stores,it is more popular among customers in
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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 and Hobart,accounting for 61%,63 and 62.5% respectively.The number of clients is lowest in
Adelaide
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,only 49% of people choose it.

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