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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rathan than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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These days there is a debate over the issue of being self-employed
instead
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 of working for an organisation because of
freedom
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 and some of the drawbacks are lack of enough funds and
time
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 management.
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, I agree with those who prefer self-employed.
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One
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On
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 the
one
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 hand, self-employment is very vital for some
individual
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individuals
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due to
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 the fact that it gives
freedom
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 to the owner.
That is
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 to say, if someone owns a
business
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, it is very easy for him to run other things depending
at
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 what
time
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 the
business
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starst
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starts
start
 working. there is always which is the opposite
to
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of
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 company work where
by
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apply
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you have to arrive at the
time
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 you are needed without fail. the peace of mind and
freedom
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 of working at any
time
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 makes so many people
to
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opt for
sel-employment
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self-employment
.
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, research done by John at Bugema
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 shows that 60% of the individual who owns jobs always have
freedom
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 at their workplaces.
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, I believe working
for
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on
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 your own is better than
organisation
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an organisation
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 job.
On the other hand
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, there are demerits of owning a
business
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such
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 as insufficient funds and poor management of
time
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.
In other words
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, the majority of the people fail to get enough money to boost their businesses which leads to
collapse
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the collapse
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 of the
business
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 and
hence
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 they end up being jobless.
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, some other members take
for
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it for
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 granted
that
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and end up reporting for work at any
time
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 since there is no
one
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whose
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who
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 is going to condom them not knowing that it
affacts
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affects
 the
business
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 in
one
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 way or the other.
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, Miss Joyce from
the morning
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The Morning
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 magazine said that failure
for
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of
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 the employer to report at the workplace to see how things
runs
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run
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,
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 always leads to losses of the
business
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 by 30%.
Hence
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 self-employed should
comes
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come
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 with good
time
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 management and enough money. In conclusion, In my opinion, I believe that some members should be
business
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 owners since it brings
freedom
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 to them,
however
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, money issues to support the
business
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 and bad
time
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 keeping
becomes
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become
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 a problem
at the end
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 of the day.
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