The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart provides information about the
percentage
of five city residents in Australia.
Overall
, it is clear from the chart that the
percentage
of those who went to the cafe for
coffee
or tea in the
last
4
week
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weeks
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increased,
while
opposite
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the opposite
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was true in the
percentage
of people who bought fresh espresso in the
last
4 weeks.
According to
what is shown,it is noticeable that
Malboune
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Melbourne
and Hobart showed the same proportion of people who went to
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a cafe
the cafe
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cafe
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cafes
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for
coffee
or tea in the
last
4 weeks,by around 64% respectively. Sydney illustrates a similar
trend
by above 60%.
However
, the
percentage
in Brisbane decreased by almost 56%,
while
Adelaide showed under 50%.
On the other hand
, looking at the feedback in more detail, we can see that consumers in Brisbane and Hobart provided an upward
trend
by above 50%,to
bought
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buy
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instant
coffee
in the
last
4 weeks,
while
Adelaide
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registered
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similar
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a similar
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trend
of 50%
,
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before fell rapidly to just under 46%. one notable point is people who bought fresh
coffee
showed the lowest
trend
for the whole period by just under 45% for three cities which are Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart ,
while
both Brisbane and Adelaide had an equal proportions of just over 30%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, coffee, trend with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.

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