The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.

The given chart provides insight into one country’s exports within the diverse categories in the span of 2015 to 2016

whereas

the table showcases the percentage alteration in the respective exports and compares both two years.

Overall

, it can be clearly seen that in both years the highest percentage of the export revenues belongs to petroleum products among other categories. First of all, during the time frame 2015 to 2016, the demand for textiles increased and

this

change is explained by 15.24% which corresponds to roughly five billion

dollar

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dollars

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. totally. Meanwhile, the profit of

egerms

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germs

gems

and jewellery have experienced a decrease which corresponded 5.18%.

Secondly

, when it comes to the exportation number of agricultural products, the percentage of its alteration is a testament to its constant remain during

this

period. The exportation of engineered goods has increased by approximately five billion dollars akin to textiles.

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