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The chart below gives information about the production of grains, measured in million metric tons, from the years 2010 to 2015, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the production of grains, measured in million metric tons, from the years 2010 to 2015, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates some data regarding the grains production, which are
wheat
, barley, maize, and rice during the period from 2010 until a projection of the same crops’ production in 2030. From an
overall
 perspective, the highest rates of
crops
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crop
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 outcomes were
wheat
 and barley;
whereas
, the lowest two proportions of
grains
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grain
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 production were rice and maize. On the one hand, the
wheat
 was experienced
an increasing rates
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an increasing rate
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 from the beginning to the end. It
was
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accounted for 100 in 2010
until
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and
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 it will reach 110 in 2030.
However
, the number of barley will experience 100 million metric tons in 2030, which was considered the same amount of
wheat
 crop in 2010.
On the other hand
,
the
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apply
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rice was forecasted to be the lowest one of
the
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all grains which
was
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were
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 witnessed 24.7 in 2010 and will grow almost 1
milion
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million
ton
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tons
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 until it
reach
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reaches
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 2030.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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