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The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon . summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon . summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The given diagrams depict various stages of the life cycle of a giant fish named
as
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salmon
.
Ovarall
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Overall
, the
salmon
 life cycle starts from the
eggs
 and it grows to become a larger fish in three main stages. Approximately half of the
life time
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lifetime
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salmon
 spend in the lower
river
 and rest in the open sea. In detail, Adult salmons who are 70-76 cm in size
lays
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eggs
 in the upper
river
 where water moves slowly. They
ley
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lay
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 their
eggs
 under the reeds and were covered with small stones. It will take approximately 5-6 months to hatch these
eggs
.
Thereafter
,
from
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these
eggs
'
frys
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fries
are coming
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 out and they are only 2-8 cm in size.
However
, these frys lived in the lower
river
 area, where the water
moves
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moved
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 fast. These frys live for nearly 4 years in
this
 lower
river
 area to become slightly larger smolt which is approximately 12-15 cm in size.
Following
this
stage
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 they move to
open
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the open
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 sea area to become
a
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adult
salmon
 and they live in the open sea for nearly 5 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, eggs, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "moves" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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