Governments should fund scientific research rather than commercial organisations. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement.

It is argued that sponsoring scientific investigations should be more prioritized by the government than giving away funds to commercial organizations.
This
essay will give complete agreement with the statement
along with
the reasons behind
this
notion extensively.
To begin
with, the primary reason why authorities should invest financial resources in research
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is that the research done by scientists should have access to everyone rather than just a particular group of people. To be more precise, if an invention is done by a privately funded organization
then
they might sell it for a high amount of money making a profit which might not be possible for an ordinary man to take advantage of that.
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task achievement
The essay touches on an important aspect of the debate but fails to extensively explore or support the argument sufficiently. To improve, ensure you fully answer the question by discussing both sides or providing a more nuanced argument if you strongly agree or disagree. Include a conclusion to summarize your points.
coherence and cohesion
The essay needs more coherence in the way it connects ideas and arguments. Use transitional phrases to guide the reader through your points. Present a clear argument from the beginning and ensure it is followed throughout the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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