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What are advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live and study aboard?

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There are several positive and negative impacts of living and studying
aboard
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abroad
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. Living and studying abroad are big decisions which is urgent to be
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. Living and studying abroad are
correctly
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 with
people
 who want significant challenges.
However
,
this
 option is not appropriate for
people
 who want to stay in their comfort zone for their lives. There are some good impacts from living and studying abroad.
First,
increase experience living in a foreign
country
. Many fantastic experiences we can get if we live and study abroad.
Second,
enhance language ability. We will interact with local
people
, students, lecturers, etc. It's very powerful for training a foreign language ability.
Third,
having a wide network. We will meet many new
people
 on our campus or in a new environment.
On the contrary
, living and studying in a foreign
country
 has some negative impacts.
First,
we can have a risk of mental health problems. Living abroad can cause culture shock because, generally, there are many cultural differences from the
country
 of origin.
Second,
we can have risky financial problems. For some countries, the cost of living in another
country
 is higher than in the
country
 of origin.
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