It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
A lot of
money
need
to fix and look after old Wrong verb form
is needed
buildings
and this fees
ought to Change the determiner
this fee
these fees
save
Wrong verb form
be saved
up
on luxury Rephrase
and spent
buildings
instead
. I tend to disagree with this
idea because of the benefits of conserving old buildings
on the economy, environment, pollution and people
's health and it is more economical to conserve buildings
, another point is that some old buildings
are historic.
On the other hand
, construction and demolition will produce a lot of industrial waste and it damages the government
and
when the Correct word choice
apply
government
keeps old buildings
it saves too much money
and the government
might be spent
Wrong verb form
spend
Correct pronoun usage
it into
into
the processing environment. Change preposition
on
On the other hand
, during construction air is
pollution especially affects Unnecessary verb
apply
people
living around and when pollution is fewer
Correct quantifier usage
less
people
health is better and the Change noun form
people's
government
will not waste money
for
medical costs.
Another point to consider is that Change preposition
on
improvement
and keeping ancient Replace the word
improving
buildings
pays out money
and this
money
should be invest
Change the verb form
be invested
be investing
for
new Change preposition
in
buildings
and in my opinion, the government
should spend too much money
for
keeping safe and Change preposition
on
repair
old Wrong verb form
repairing
buildings
actually crucial places in this
case, historic buildings
or traditional houses because they are old and ancient and it is very important for keeping them.
A good reason for what
If some old Correct pronoun usage
that
buildings
demolition
and construction modern Wrong verb form
are demolished
buildings
instead
. Including, many old Add a missing verb
are instead
buildings
are broken down or the government
might be developing and transforming a neighborhood
and constructing luxury Change the spelling
neighbourhood
buildings
or skyscrapers.
Finally
, In general, I tend to disagree because it is a more economical project and it might be damaging for
the environment and Change preposition
to
people
's health.Submitted by TUTOO on
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