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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
line
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 graph illustrates the level of visitors
in
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 a particular Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017. In general, two out of three lines
were
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had
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 a dramatic upward trend except the triangle's
line
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.
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, each
line
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 had its difficulty
to
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 the others. The
visistors
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visitors
 who are staying on
island
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the island
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 (triangle's
line
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) was the most remarkable
line
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 among
three
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the three
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 lines. In the
intial
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initial
 two years (2010 and 2011), there was the same number of tourists, at 0,75
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millions
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million
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. After that,
this
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 figure was growing up to 1.5
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millions
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million
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 in 2013 and unchanging until 2015.
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, it decreased shortly to 1.25
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millions
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million
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 (2016) and went back to 1.5
millionsin
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million in
millions
millions in
 2017. The
line
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 of visitors who
staying
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stayed
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 on cruise ships was lower than the others.
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, from 2010 to 2012, there was a slight fluctuation from 0.25 to 0.5 and back to 0.25
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millions
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million
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 in 2012. During the next five years, it rose significantly from 0.25
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millions
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million
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 to 2
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millions
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million
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, millions with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • gradual increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • plateau
  • seasonal variation
  • external influences
  • tourist influx
  • sustainable tourism
  • economic impact
  • hospitality industry
  • travel restrictions
  • visitor statistics
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