Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Nowadays,
due to
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widespread
of
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globalisation,
internet
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the internet
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has been an important aspect
in
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of
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this
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modern era, most of the population, especially youngsters have been using it for the
use
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of,
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, study and social.
This
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essay will discuss whether or not improving internet access is more important for governments to invest
than
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improving public
transportation
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. In Indonesia, massive infrastructure projects develop,
such
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as roads. The government is actively building toll roads and approximately 73% of it is operating now for populations to
use
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. In Jakarta, they are continuing the growth of public
transportation
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for the community to
use
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, including but not limited to buses and trains.
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, as an archipelago country, there are a lot of small islands
surround
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Indonesia and many small cities that
lacks
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the
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transportation
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. In an interview, there was a student who asked why their place
lacks
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public transport. The lack of
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facility affects their education since they have to pay for a driver to send them to school.
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, the developed countries provide transport for
public
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the public
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to
use
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as it is very convenient and safe. Owning vehicles is good,
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, it increases the air
pollutions
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pollution
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especially
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in cities and
volume
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the volume
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of the road which
basically
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not a win-win solution.
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,
this
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is the reason why the government should consider the development of
transportation
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for a better environment. In conclusion, internet access is beneficial but
however
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,
the
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government must urge the development of public
transportation
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for the prosperity of mankind.
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Focus on answering the prompt directly and clearly. Your introduction should clearly state your position on the topic. While your conclusion restates this, the body paragraphs should consistently support this stance.
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