The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.
The diagram illustrates the stages in the life of the salmon, from birth to maturity.
Overall
, it is clear that
there are eight stages, from being an egg in the river to becoming an adult in the ocean. Also
, in the middle of the way, they will migrate through estuary areas
.
First of all, the salmon fish are born in eggs, incubated in the river, and then
turn to emergence level. After that, they start to rear the fresh water, just before the estuary rearing stage in estuary areas
. In the next stage, they will migrate to rearing areas
in the ocean, in order to become completely grown up and matured.
After maturing and growing up, the salmon fish then
migrate to the spawning areas
in the ocean. Following
this
, they would go back to their homeland, where they were born, in the river so that they could spawn there freely.Submitted by TUTOO on
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