The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.
The diagram illustrates the stages in the life of the salmon, from birth to maturity.
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there are eight stages, from being an egg in the river to becoming an adult in the ocean. Linking Words
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, in the middle of the way, they will migrate through estuary Linking Words
areas
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First of all, the salmon fish are born in eggs, incubated in the river, and Use synonyms
then
turn to emergence level. After that, they start to rear the fresh water, just before the estuary rearing stage in estuary Linking Words
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. In the next stage, they will migrate to rearing Use synonyms
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in the ocean, in order to become completely grown up and matured.
After maturing and growing up, the salmon fish Use synonyms
then
migrate to the spawning Linking Words
areas
in the ocean. Use synonyms
Following
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this
, they would go back to their homeland, where they were born, in the river so that they could spawn there freely.Linking Words
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