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The diagram shows below how ethanol fuel is produced from corn.

The diagram shows below how ethanol fuel is produced from corn.
#ethanol #fuel #corn
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Contained in the diagram is information pertaining to the method of producing
ethanol
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 fuel from
corn
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.
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, it is a complex process, commencing with
corn
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 which is harvested, fermented and separated to culminate with purifying
ethanol
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 and be ready for distribution. The initial stage focuses on the process of preparing
corn
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. The procedure commences with harvested
corn
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 being stored in a suitable place before it is ready for milling.
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this
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stepm
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step
 the
corn
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 is mixed with water and cooked for 4 hours. After the step of cooking, that mixture undergoes a fermentation stage which lasts for 2 days.
Ethanol
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 purified is the focus of the latter steps in the sequence. Once the mixture
fermention
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fermentation
 has been completed, the liquid
ethanol
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 is separated from the mixture,
at
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and at
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 the same time some solid by-products are
also
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 taken out. In the following juncture, the
ethanol
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 has to be purified to remove impurities for 5 hours. The whole process terminates when
this
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ethanol
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 is stored for a set period of time to be distributed to
wholesellers
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wholesalers
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol, corn with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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