New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

There is an ongoing debate surrounding whether the changes in the way children

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their spare

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due to

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modern

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are beneficial or not.

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writer holds a notion that the drawbacks of being addicted to computer

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outweighed by the benefits of the diversity of

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and the easy

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to modern

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. One of the main beneficial aspects of

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changing how

teenagers

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their spare time is the large quantity of

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. To clarify, the Internet provides

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different

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types of entertainment including computer

games

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or

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about new

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of sports.

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,

teenagers

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bored or dissatisfied

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of

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provided

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hobbies

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. Take South Korea as an illustration, where developers provide a

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large

number of entertainment on the Internet leading to the rise of excitement trend among

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. Another advantageous factor worth noting is that contemporary

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give

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easier

access

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to

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digital

entertainments

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.

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to say,

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are able to

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to

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new digital

hobbies

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without spending huge

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of money to pay for them.

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situation leads to

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widespread interest which

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exciting and available for everyone of all ages.

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, consider Vietnam, where

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have

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to different movies without buying tickets

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cinema

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,

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, some arguments surrounding the addiction of

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towards computers or mobile

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game

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.

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, some parents worried about their children playing

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without getting outside

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leading to their health problems.

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argument has credibility,

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, it can be discredited because

technologies

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provide

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social

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network

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networks

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, where they can develop their digital or

sport

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hobbies

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. In conclusion, modern

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could

leads

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to the addiction to

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on computers and phones;

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, it can be outweighed by the diverse types of

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and the

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of digital entertainment.

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, the

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of

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children's spare time activity caused by contemporary

technologies

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have more beneficial

effect

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effects

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than drawbacks.