The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
The given table compares the proportions of consumptions spent on different categories of merchandise in 5 different
countries
in 2002.
Generally, it is apparent that the most of expenditures were allocated to food, drinks and Tobacco in each Use synonyms
Use synonyms
countries
, Change to a singular noun
country
while
leisure and education cost the least in these 5 nations.
Out of five given Linking Words
countries
, the Use synonyms
consumptions
of food, drinks and tobacco spent by Turkish consumers Fix the agreement mistake
consumption
were
noticeably higher than the other Correct subject-verb agreement
was
countries
, reaching Use synonyms
to
around 32%, almost 3% higher than the figure in Ireland (28.91%). Change preposition
apply
Similarly
, Turks expensed the highest percentage of income for leisure and educational activities, with the data standing at 4.35%, Linking Words
while
expenditure on clothing and footwear was significantly higher in Italy, at precisely 9%Linking Words
,
than in any of the other Remove the comma
apply
countries
.
Diverting our attention to Sweden and Spain, the lowest proportion of money was consumed on not only food, drinks and tobacco but Use synonyms
also
clothing and footwear in the former country, which accounted for 15.77% and 5.40% respectively. Spain had slightly higher figures for these categories, but the lowest figure for leisure/education, at only 1.98%.Linking Words
Submitted by luoyinjian2 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼