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You should write at least 150 words. Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.

You should write at least 150 words. Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.
#chorleywood #village #london #population #middle #century #development
the given map depicts information about the population of
village
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the village
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 next to
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London
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london
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London
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 which
were
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was
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 enhanced gradually in the
mids of
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middle
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 19th century after the analysis, it is clearly stated that two
raods
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roads
raids
 were moving from northeast towards northwest bisecting the main road which moving upward towards north
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after
afer
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after
 that, the
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Chorleywood
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chorleywood
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Chorleywood
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 station which was established on railway in 1909 the road is
moving
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moved
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zig zag
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zig-zag
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 in the east direction touching residential
area
 adjacent to it, in north large place for housing zone
furthermore
, from north to south a large route of motorway surpassing the two main roads from
northeast
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the northeast
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 close to
this
, a district location for people to live
whereas
, in the middle zone of
this
area
 a large park and golf course was established for recreation
overall
, it is vividly manifested that the infrastructure for
this
 village
area
 was steadily on the rise and more residential
area
 for people to live in it with
having
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a facility of golf, park and
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a
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railway station
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Steadily
  • Pivotal events
  • Significant change
  • Transportation links
  • Commuter village
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial areas
  • Public facilities
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental impact
  • Community life
  • Conservation efforts
  • Maintaining character
  • Vicinity
  • Unique aspects
  • Common challenges
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