Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals.

It is commonly believed that

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wildlife parks are awful for wild

animals

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and should be demolished.

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some argue that menageries can be helpful in defending predatory

animals

. In my opinion,

zoos

are useful

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guarding

creatures

. On the one hand, many argue that

zoos

are dangerous and they think

creatures

may be patient in the cages because there are a lot of careless employees

consequently

, these workers might not look well and

animals

will become ill. Especially wild

animals

do not like

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in the cage. If workers

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careless

animals

can escape the

zoos

and they may hurt every person or children.

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there are so many

people

every day and each holiday and

people

are remarkably naughty and they pollute the animal cages so every animal be sick and may die. Many

people

feel

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wildlife parks should be knocked down.

On the other hand

, others say that

zoos

are not useless because

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today

animals

which are extremely important for

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and nature

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mammoths, dolphins, white eagles and

another

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are dying out in nature so illegal hunters are hunting and they are becoming rare.

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rare

animals

are being killed by wild and strong

creatures

so they are becoming endangered. So

zoos

can provide with nourishment them and scientists in there can increase these types of

creatures

and menageries avoid dying the life form. In conclusion,

although

some

people

believe that wildlife parks have a detrimental impact on the well-being of wild

animals

and ought to be dismantled,

while

others say that, keeping

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of

animals

can be beneficial in protecting predatory species. I think

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zoos

are need

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for wild

creatures

because they can protect the

animals

by

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any dangers.