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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The given picture describes the change in total
of
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wheat exports
particularly
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 in
Australia
,
Canada
, and
European
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the European
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Community
. In summary, the total number of wheat sold in
Australia
 and
Canada
 decreased,
on the other
hand
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 an increase happened in
European
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the European
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Community
.
Canada
marked
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was marked
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 as the highest exporter within 4 years, starting from 20
million
tonnes
 to 25
million
tonnes
 before significantly plummeting to approximately 15
million
tonnes
 in 1989. Eventually, the graph saw a bounce back to about 18
million
tonnes
 in the
last
 year presented,
however
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 it
then
 was not in the first place anymore.
Similarly
,
Australia
, which started at 15
million
tonnes
, outreached
European
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the European
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Community
 in 1986, unfortunately it was
back being
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surpassed by
European
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the European
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Community
 two years
after
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later
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 and showed a downward trend until
finally
touch
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 its lowest point at 12
million
tonnes
 in 1990. Unlike
Canada
 and
Australia
,
European
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the European
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Community
 underwent a pitfall in 1986, resulting in
lower
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 number than
Australia
.
However
, it
then
 continued to rise to 20
million
tonnes
.
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