The chart below shows the percentage of people in the UK who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day between 2001 and 2008

The chart below shows the percentage of people in the UK who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day between 2001 and 2008
The bar chart illustrates the
percentage
of
men
,
women
and children who
eats
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five different portions of fruits and vegetables in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
Overall
, it can be seen that
,
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women
are the largest consumers whilst
men
and children followed the same trend throughout the given period. The
percentage
of
women
who
consumes
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fruits and vegetables started off at slightly above 20% in 2001 followed by
increase
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in the next five years till it reached its peak which was way above 30% in 2006.
Then
, it was followed by a decrease in the remainder year.
However
,
men
and
women
followed
same
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trend, with the first three years having the same
percentage
(
men
approximately 17%, children approximately 13% respectively). More so, the
percentage
increased gradually from 2004 to 2006 by 5% each year , after
then
a gradual fall in the remaining years to reach approximately 25% for both.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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