the charts give information about two genres of TV programes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia

the charts give information about two genres of TV programes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia
The graph below outlines data on two genres of TV channels seen by each gender and four different ages in Australia. The index of females for almost
two
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the two
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programmes was practically identical,
nevertheless
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the number was transparent for
male
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males
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, more precisely
man
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men
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utilize game shows more rather than
reality
shows.
A
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The
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quantity of elderly dwellers, as
depicts
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the
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in the
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chart, is in equanimity that sufficient to
a
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70%, the proportion is
although
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equivalent to 50, for adolescents,
in age
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aged
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16-24, for both
of
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interests. As we see, mature citizens, prefer
more
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entertainment shows as
reality
programmes , than channels sophisticated to plays,
consequently
a
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the
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total amount was elevated for ages
in
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25-34 from 40
,
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to 60 for
reality
shows indeed. Interestingly, adults
furthermore
were abnormally more about
reality
shows comparing both of them.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words reality with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • viewership trends
  • genre
  • comparative analysis
  • distribution
  • notable deviations
  • cultural influences
  • societal factors
  • predictive trends
  • viewing preferences
  • target audience
  • popularity metrics
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