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The popularity of online education has grown significantly in recent years. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#popularity #education #years #development
Over the
last
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, the number of people to online education has increased significantly.
Although
 there are several advantages of online learning, it can have some disadvantages as well. In
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 I will try to discuss both
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the positive
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or
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 negative sides of
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 a conclusion. On the one hand, there are several benefits of online education. The first merit of it is considered to be that it allows for a flexible class schedule which is ideal for working
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.
For instance
, people are able to work full time whilst studying or online learning is usually
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.
And online
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 courses allow
students
 to study at their own pace.
Such
 as
students
 can take breaks in their learning to complete a course
sonner
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sooner
. Another positive aspect is thought to be that it offers more
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diverse
 methods of learning.
On the other hand
, despite
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 positive,
students
 are reminded of deadlines. One of the major disadvantages of it is that teachers can provide help to individual
students
.
For example
,
students
 can have
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 interaction with other
students
 and their
professor
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professors
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. Teachers can provide instant feedback and support in the classroom. Another important
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merit is that mature
students
 don't need to study
a longside
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 immature, younger
students
. In conclusion,
while
 the popularity of online tuition can offer several positives, there may be some drawbacks too. From my personal point
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,
advantages
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the advantages
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 of the will outweigh the disadvantages.
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