The graph below shows in percentage term the charging patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.
The function below which shows in
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percentage
persentage
terms the changing patterns of domestic Correct your spelling
percentage
access
to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom
In general, the graph has gradually increase
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increased
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aspects (CD player, Mobile Change preposition
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phone
, Home
computer
and Internet access
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The main features are CD player and internet access
held the highest, also
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comparison from the beginning CD player had 60%,
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years
. Whereas
, Internet access
had approximately 10%, and came from 1998/99 years
Between of them Modal phone
and Home
computer
have different situations. Beginning in 1996 / 97 years
they were set up together. Altough
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Home
computer
was higher than Mobile
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a Mobile
the Mobile
phone
. In 1998/99 years
, Mobile phone
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Home
computer
. Fix the agreement mistake
computers
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