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The graph below shows in percentage term the charging patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.

The graph below shows in percentage term the charging patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.
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The function below which shows in
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percentage
persentage
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percentage
 terms the changing patterns of domestic
access
 to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom In general, the graph has gradually
increase
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on
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in
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 aspects (CD player, Mobile
phone
,
Home
computer
 and Internet
access
) The main features are CD player and internet
access
 held the highest,
also
 the lowest title. In comparison from the beginning CD player had 60%
,
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 and was set up in 1996/97
years
.
Whereas
, Internet
access
 had approximately 10%, and came from 1998/99
years
 Between of them Modal
phone
 and
Home
computer
 have different situations. Beginning in 1996 / 97
years
 they were set up together.
Altough
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Although
,
Home
computer
 was higher than
Mobile
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a Mobile
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phone
. In 1998/99
years
, Mobile
phone
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phones
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 overtook
Home
computer
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computers
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.
In addition
 made the point of intersection
at
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in
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 the same year.
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