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Your English speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport

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I hope
this
 letter finds you in radiant health and best of spirits. You will be glad to know that I have discovered the perfect sport for you which is
tennis
. Ever since ,
the
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high school you have been fond of
tennis
 player Sania Mirza ,I believe
tennis
 aligns perfectly with your interest and if I vividly remember you had
also
 won an annual sports trophy for
tennis
 in high school.
Besides
this
, revisiting
this
 sport will not be only nostalgic but
also
 beneficial in maintaining health , fitness, strength and agility. Conveniently , there’s a
tennis
 club near my house with a coach who happens to be my father’s friend. I will approach him for assistance with the admission process. Could you confirm if the location suits you ? Coincidentally,for the past
month
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 I have been thinking of joining the club myself. I think it is a great idea for both of us to become members and embark on
this
tennis
 journey together. The prospect of learning
tennis
 with you is genuinely exciting. Looking forward to hearing your thoughts on
this
 Yours lovingly, Parthvi
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Task Response
Be sure to fully address the prompt by expanding on how learning tennis can contribute to your friend's overall well-being, potentially by detailing the mental and social benefits of engaging in sports.
Coherence and Cohesion
Although your essay has a solid structure, consider using a wider range of cohesive devices to link ideas more smoothly. Transition words like 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', or 'Additionally' can make your points flow more naturally.
Coherence and Cohesion
Introduce a brief conclusion to summarize your main points and reiterate the suggestion. This will give your letter a more rounded feel and reinforce your recommendation.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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