The chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying drinking habits in five Australian cities

The chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying drinking habits in five Australian cities
The bar chart demonstrates the outcome of an investigation on
coffee
and tea purchasing preferences among inhabitants of five Australian cities in
last
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4 weeks.
Overall
, going to
cafe
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a cafe
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for
coffee
or tea was the most significant habit of residents in almost all cities, whilst buying fresh
coffee
was the least prioritized. The pattern
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fresh
coffee
plateaued at the percentage rate of
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almost
35% in Brisbane and close to 45% in Sydney.
Comperatively
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Comparatively
to buying instant
coffee
habit,
this
feature remained considerably lower starting with the least significant difference in Adelaide (around 15%) and
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by
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Melbourne and Hobart, around 20% in both cases. A different pattern emerged for going to
cafe
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cafes
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for
coffee
and tea custom. For four cities,
such
as Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane and Hobart, the percentage degree was dramatically higher than two other habits,
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off at about 55% to
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almost
65%. Only in Adelaide buying instant
coffee
was slightly higher than visits to
cafe
custom, but no more than 1%. To sum it up, we could observe two main
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dynamics:
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low level of those habitants who preferred purchasing fresh
coffee
and
on the contrary
high level of going to
cafe
attitude.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • preference
  • beverage
  • caffeine
  • demographics
  • trend
  • survey
  • cultural significance
  • habit
  • seasonal variation
  • health consciousness
  • availability
  • implications
  • urban vs. rural consumption
  • data interpretation
  • quantitative analysis
  • fluctuations
  • patterns
  • peak times
  • economical impact
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