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The chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying drinking habits in five Australian cities

The chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying drinking habits in five Australian cities
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The bar chart demonstrates the outcome of an investigation on
coffee
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 and tea purchasing preferences among inhabitants of five Australian cities in
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last
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 4 weeks.
Overall
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, going to
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cafe
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a cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or tea was the most significant habit of residents in almost all cities, whilst buying fresh
coffee
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 was the least prioritized. The pattern
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of buying
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 fresh
coffee
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 plateaued at the percentage rate of
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almost
 35% in Brisbane and close to 45% in Sydney.
Comperatively
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 to buying instant
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 habit,
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 feature remained considerably lower starting with the least significant difference in Adelaide (around 15%) and
following
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 by
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sustantial
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substantial
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 Melbourne and Hobart, around 20% in both cases. A different pattern emerged for going to
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cafe
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cafes
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 for
coffee
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 and tea custom. For four cities,
such
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 as Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane and Hobart, the percentage degree was dramatically higher than two other habits,
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 off at about 55% to
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almost
 65%. Only in Adelaide buying instant
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 was slightly higher than visits to
cafe
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 custom, but no more than 1%. To sum it up, we could observe two main
preferences
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 dynamics:
significantly
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 low level of those habitants who preferred purchasing fresh
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 and
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 high level of going to
cafe
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 attitude.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cafe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • preference
  • beverage
  • caffeine
  • demographics
  • trend
  • survey
  • cultural significance
  • habit
  • seasonal variation
  • health consciousness
  • availability
  • implications
  • urban vs. rural consumption
  • data interpretation
  • quantitative analysis
  • fluctuations
  • patterns
  • peak times
  • economical impact
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